It is neither nor useful to provide university places for a high proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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modern era, it will not be efficient to allocate university seats in a higher ratio to youngsters. I disagree with
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because young people are the future of the
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, who will help to develop
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the unemployment
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ratio in
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generation will
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. In conclusion, I disagree that there is
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any benefit to
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seats in higher educational institutes to young people.
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is mainly because they will be helpful to grow their
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with their studies and with higher studies,
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, which will help to eradicate the unemployment problem in the
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Give a full answer to the question. State clearly how far you agree or disagree, then explain your view in two main body parts.
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Develop each main point. For example, explain how more study places can help people get work, and how skilled workers can help the country.
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Add a clear, real example. You could mention nurses, teachers, or computer workers who need university study before they can do their jobs.
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Also discuss the other side for a short part. More places may cost a lot, and not every young person needs university. Then explain why you still disagree.
coherence and cohesion
Your opening and ending are clear, but the essay has no main body paragraphs. Use one opening, two body paragraphs, and one ending.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to show the order of your ideas: First, Also, For example, However, and Therefore.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid saying the same idea again in the ending. Use the ending to briefly bring together the two reasons from your body paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph about one main idea. Start with a topic sentence, explain it, and give an example before moving to the next idea.
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You give a clear view: you disagree with the idea in the question.
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Your reasons are on topic: young people can help the country and may have better chances of getting work.
coherence and cohesion
You use an opening and an ending, so the reader can see your main position.
coherence and cohesion
The ideas follow a simple order, from your view to your reasons and then your ending.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • limited resources
  • quality of education
  • strained resources
  • job market
  • underemployment
  • competition for skilled jobs
  • vocational training
  • apprenticeships
  • economic constraints
  • public budgets
  • inefficiencies
  • devalue
  • significance
  • perceived quality
  • universal access
  • diversity in skills
  • balanced society
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