The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.
The three maps compare the modifications that took place at the Queen Mary Hospital between 1960 and 2000.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
size
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the size
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of the hospital remained the same throughout the period, with significant changes and additions made in its
facillities
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facilities
. In 1960, there were only four rectangular pieces of land divided into
shopping
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a shopping
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centre
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and
hospital
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a hospital
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located along the main road. Farmland was situated towards the
south-side
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south side
of the shopping
centre
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,
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similarly
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similarly,
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the car park was at the south of the hospital. There were considerable changes made in the next twenty years, where the shopping
centre
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was demolished and made into a pharmacy and cancer
centre
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;
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,
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and the farmland was converted to a nursing school.
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,
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the car park and hospital remained unchanged. In 2000, there
has been
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was
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a substantial expansion in the area of the cancer
centre
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, taking over the area where
nursing
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the nursing
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school was located. The car park and nursing school
and
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merged into the earlier parking area
,
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;
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the hospital and pharmacy remained unaltered.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • renovation
  • expansion
  • modernization
  • facilities
  • departments
  • adjacent structures
  • patient care
  • medical technology
  • specialized centers
  • eco-friendly initiatives
  • initial layout
  • construction
  • extensions
  • improvements
  • community health services
  • capabilities
  • repurposing
  • developments
  • efficiency
  • upgrades
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