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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to ma

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Introduction
Nowadays, there are development of technologies to deal with recycling waste. I completely disagreed that
Law
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 is the only way to improve the situation. Even though there is no significant improvement on the issue
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 we have more waste than the recycling efforts because
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every country
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Body paragraph 1
Recycling
wastes
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waste
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 is important
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on the other
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 it has to be
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cost-effective
 and sustainable. If
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 make recycling a legal requirement, it might not get better since recycling waste must meet certain requirements which protect the environment
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 of
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By giving incentives, making campaigns
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 make people
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aware that they can do general recycling by themselves safely on
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. If we can advocate and educate the public, it is manageable and
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 the pressure on them.
Conclusion
In my point of view, making recycling a requirement by law
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may lead to more complicated
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 as various
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 of situations are there for the public to deal with in daily
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life
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Answer the full question more directly. Say clearly how far you agree that laws are needed, and explain when laws may help and when other ways may work better.
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Develop each main idea. For example, explain what kind of law could be used, who would check it, and why it may or may not change people’s habits.
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Use clear, real examples. You could mention bins for paper and glass, money off local tax, or fines for homes that do not sort waste.
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Your idea about cost and the environment is useful, but it needs more detail. Explain why recycling can cost a lot and how a good system can still protect the earth.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clearer four-part plan: introduction, one paragraph on laws, one paragraph on other ways, and a conclusion with your final view.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body paragraph with one clear main sentence. Then add reasons and an example before moving to the next idea.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words such as “However”, “For example”, “As a result”, and “In addition”. This will make the flow easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating the same point about different countries and daily life. Make each paragraph do a different job.
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You give a clear view that law is not the only answer, and you suggest other ways such as public education, campaigns, and rewards.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an opening, two main paragraphs, and a final view. This gives it a basic shape that can be built on.
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You raise useful points about cost, long-term plans, and care for the environment.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Waste management
  • Recycling
  • Sustainability
  • Mandatory
  • Voluntary
  • Legislative measures
  • Environmental impact
  • Public awareness
  • Regulation
  • Sanctions
  • Compliance
  • Recycling facilities
  • Consumer behavior
  • Waste reduction
  • Resource conservation
  • Circular economy
  • Eco-friendly
  • Biodegradable
  • Landfill
  • Global initiative
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