The chart below show the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian features,and make comparisons where relevant

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The chart below show the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian features,and make comparisons where relevant
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below show the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian features,and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph illustrates the changing rates of crime
of crime
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in the inner city
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whereas
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Newport city centre
by
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, by
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comparions into different areas between 10 years preiod time.
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, from the information
that
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given, burglary is
highest
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the highest
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follow
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by car theft.
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, robbery is lowest.
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, burglary is
decline
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declining,
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such
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as car theft.
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, robbery has
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fluctuated
.
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, car theft is risng up in the end of
period
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.
Inittially
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Initially
, more than 3500
cases
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for burglary
and
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increased during 2003 -2004.
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, from
2004
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2004,
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it extremely felt approximately 2300
cases
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in 4 years and remain to 1400
cases
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in
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the end of
period
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.
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, robbery is lowest at 600
cases
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.
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, it fluctuated
since
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2003 to 2012.
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,
,
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2800
cases
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until 2005 by
aproxiamtely
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approximately,
alongside
this
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there
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, there
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were declined in 2006 to 2009
, How ever
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. However
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, it
was rising up
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rose
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in 2010 and 2012.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast, however, on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • the number of incidents
  • crime rates
  • over the nine-year period
  • overall trend
  • the highest figure
  • the lowest figure
  • a sharp decline
  • a slight increase
  • a dramatic fall
  • a gradual recovery
  • fluctuate between
  • remain relatively stable
  • reach a peak
  • drop to
  • rise to
  • end the period at
  • overtake burglary
  • the most common crime
  • the least common offence
  • by contrast
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