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The diagrams below show the development of a town called Brindell and the local areas in 1800, 1900 and 2000.

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The diagrams below show the development of a town called Brindell and the local areas in 1800, 1900 and 2000.
Three maps illustrate the developments which took place in
Brindell
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 and local areas in 1800, 1900 and 2000.
Overall
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,
Brindell
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 and rural places were simple-looking in 1800
,
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day
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day
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this
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 place developed in 1900, and by 2000, many facilities were created. In the year 1800, there was located
Farmland
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 in north-west
side
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. Woodland was north-east
side
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. River Stour is situated in the corner. On the west-south
side
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 of the river is
Brindell
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.
Farmland
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 located opposite
Brindell
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. Coming to the 1900s, those times were developing
day
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 by
day
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. On the west-north
side
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 was
Farmland
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, and it is opposite Woodland. These places have not changed compared to 1800. On the west-south
side
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 was
Brindell
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. On the east-south
side
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 was constructed Bun Hill that village for workers and Industry. In 2000, on the west-north
side
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Farmland
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, located opposite Woodland. Bun Hill Park was constructed under the Woodland. The River Stour is located in the corner. There was the west-south
side
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 in
Brindell
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. Bun Hill and the developing Industry situated opposite
Brindell
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Vocabulary: Replace the words brindell, day, farmland, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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