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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
These maps show how
road
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accsess
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access
 to a city hospital changes between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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,
while
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 the
road
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 in 2007
quite
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was quite
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 simple, in 2010 they expanded
parking
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the parking
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 area and made some changes
in
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to
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 its structure.
Firstly
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, in 2010, the city
road
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 and the hospital
road
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were
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apply
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still
remain
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remained
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,
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;
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however
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, two roundabouts were
contructed
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constructed
 in the position of the crossroad and the T-junction in 2007. There
was
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were
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 6 bus stops alongside the Hospital
road
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 in 2007, 3
in
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on
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 the left side and 3
in
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on
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 the right side. In 2010, these bus stops were
demolish
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demolished
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 and a new bus station was
contructed
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constructed
 and has ways to
conect
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connect
 both roundabouts.
Form
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From
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 the roundabout between
hospital
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Hospital Road
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road
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 and the city hospital, turning right was an
enter
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entrance
 to the car park. In
2007
Punctuation problem
2007,
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this
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 car park
servesed
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served
 both
hosital
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hospital
 staff and
public
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the public
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, but in 2010 it
shrunk
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shrank
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 and
only
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was only
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 for the staff. Go straight and turn left at the corner of the Ring
road
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, a
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. A
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 new public car park was built
in
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on
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 the Eastern side of the hospital so that it can adapt bigger amount of public vehicles visiting the hospital.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road access
  • city hospital
  • traffic flow
  • public transport facilities
  • intersection
  • roundabout
  • car park
  • dedicated
  • modifications
  • congestion
  • accessibility
  • hospital entrance
  • parking areas
  • main features
  • signage
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