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Your friend is about to move into a new house. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter offer to help him/her to move explain how exactly you can help ask him/her some questions about the new house

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Dear sukhwinder I hope you are doing well. I heard from Mansi that you are moving to new house. I know transferring the whole stuff from one place to another is really a difficult job. If you need any kind of help i am just a call away. I can come with my husband's pickup truck and help you to shift the furniture and heavy items.
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 i have big moving boxes for clothes and other stuff which i can took for you if you need them. As you know that i have a bit experience in interior designing, i can advice you about all the furniture settings and help you to give an aesthetic theme to your new home. As a you are moving to new house, i want to know its location weather it is far or near to me. Is it bigger than your previous house? How many bedrooms it has ? Is it a single family home or townhouse? will look forward for your reply your friend sweety

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You answer all parts: you offer help, say what you can do, and ask about the new home. Add a clear time when you can come, such as Saturday morning.
task response
Use a warm, friendly tone all the way through. You can say that you are happy for your friend and excited to see the new home.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has clear paragraphs: help, ways to help, and questions. This makes it easy to read.
coherence and cohesion
Link some ideas with simple words such as “also”, “because”, and “so”. For example: “I have a truck, so we can move the heavy things.”
coherence and cohesion
Start the last line with a capital letter and use a more natural close, such as “I look forward to your reply.”
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You give useful and clear help, including a truck, boxes, and help with the room design.
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Your questions are about the place, size, rooms, and type of home, so they fit the letter well.
coherence and cohesion
Each main idea is in its own paragraph, and the order of ideas is easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
The opening and close show that this is a personal letter to a friend.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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