you are not satisfied with the changing rooms in the sports center that you visit .write a letter to the manager. what the problem is how feel about the problem what steps you want the manager to take

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Dear James, I am writing
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letter regarding the dissatisfaction with the changing rooms in the game centre.
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weekends
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, I played basketball in the playground before starting the game i need to wear my game shirt. So,
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visited
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the restroom without shoes to
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change my
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clothes
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found the floor was too
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slippery
. Maybe someone
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their drinks on the floor.
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that moment, I was unable to stand barefoot on the dirty floor. I felt really bad that time because
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never faced
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type of problem at that place before. I requested
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the manager they need to take strict actions on their cleaning team because it will be a dangerous situation for the players if they slip on the wet ground. I hope you will figure out
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situation and we will not face
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scenario in upcoming time. Yours truly kajal

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Cover all three parts more fully. Say clearly what is wrong, how it makes you feel, and what you want the manager to do.
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Ask for clear actions, such as cleaning the floor at once, putting up a wet-floor sign, and checking the rooms more often.
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Use a more polite and formal tone. For example, write “I would be grateful if you could...” instead of “they need to take strict actions.”
coherence and cohesion
Put your ideas in a clear order: the problem first, your feelings next, and your request in the last main paragraph.
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Keep one main idea in each paragraph. The first paragraph can describe the wet and dirty floor only.
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Use simple linking words to make the letter easier to follow, such as “As a result”, “Therefore”, and “I would like to ask”.
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Use a suitable opening such as “Dear Sir or Madam,” if you do not know the manager’s name. End with your full name after “Yours faithfully,” or “Yours sincerely,”.
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You explain a real problem with the changing room floor and why it may be unsafe.
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You state how you felt and ask the manager to improve cleaning.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear beginning, middle, and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Your paragraphs mostly follow the order in the question.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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