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Your friend invited you to his/her birthday party, but you are unable to attend. Write a letter apologizing for your absence. In your letter: State why you cannot go Explain your reason for not contacting your friend sooner Suggest another time to meet You do NOT need to write any addresses

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Dear Sheenu, I hope you are doing well. I am so sorry
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 best
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friend,
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 because
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 missed your special day. I was unable to take
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a day
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 off
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that week just because of
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 meeting in the company. I was really busy the entire
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 week in my company projects
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due to
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this
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 was unable to contact you earlier. I thought it
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 better to meet you and
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 explain
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 in detail. I am planning to come
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next month. So we will go together
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 your favourite cafe cocabella ,
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we will celebrate your belated birthday. Lots of love Rani

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task response
You answer all the main parts: why you cannot go, why you did not write sooner, and when you can meet. Add a little more detail about the work meeting and the new plan to make the letter feel more full.
task response
Use a more natural apology at the start, such as: “I am so sorry that I cannot come to your birthday party.” This makes your main message very clear.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a clear order. Use simple link words like “because”, “so”, and “however” to join ideas more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point: the apology and reason, the late reply, and the new plan. This will make the letter easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
Use full sentences and check small word gaps, such as “take a day off”, “next month”, and “your favourite café, Cocabella”.
task response
You give a clear work reason for missing the party and suggest meeting next month at your friend’s favourite café.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a friendly greeting, clear paragraphs, and a warm closing.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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