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The table below gives information about the population of New Zealand between 2011 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

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The table below gives information about the population of New Zealand between 2011 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the data on New Zealand's
population
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 across five
age
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 categories in 2011 and 2012.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
population
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 grew, but the number of individuals under the
age
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 of 40 declined.
In addition
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, the group of citizens who were older than 65 years of
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 experienced the most notable growth. The total
population
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 of the country started at 4.4 million people and experienced
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 of 0.6% by 2012.
In contrast
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, the figures for the under-15 and 15–39
age
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 groups decreased by 0.2%, reaching 800,000 and 1.5 million people, respectively, in 2012. Meanwhile, there were 1.4 million individuals aged between 40 and 64 in 2011, and
this
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population
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 increased by 0.6% in the following year.
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, citizens aged over 65 constituted the smallest group in 2011 and experienced the most significant increase, at 4.0%, reaching 900,000 individuals by 2012.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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