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The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table illustrates data about
metro
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 systems in many cities
,
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 New York
City
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Subway
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,
London
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Tube
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, Tokyo
Subway
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, Paris
Metro
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, Mexico
City
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Metro
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, and Beijing
Subway
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.
Underground
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The underground
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 system includes Lines, Total
length
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, Annual
journeys
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, and
Cost
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the cost
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 of
single
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a single
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 ticket. There are many measurement miles for
length
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, billions for
journeys
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 and US dollars for
ticket
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tickets
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.
Overall
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,
New
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the New
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 York
City
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Subway
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 have a
significant
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significantly
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 large number
in both
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apply
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of lines and Total
length
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which
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, which
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 are 24 and 659
miels
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miles
 respectively.
Conversely
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,
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London
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the London
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Tube
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 have the least number of lines
which
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, which
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 is 11.
In addition
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,
Paris
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the Paris
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Metro
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 have the shortest
length
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which
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, which
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 is 127.
On the other hand
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, New York
City
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Subway
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 have the highest
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journeys
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annual journeys
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, of
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of Annual
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journeys
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 which is 1.65
billions
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billion
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.
as oppesed
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As opposed
 to
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London
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the London
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Tube
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,
it's
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it
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 has 1.2 million whic is the lowest
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journeys
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number of annual journeys
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.
Morever
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Moreover
,
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London
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the London
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Tube
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 have a dramatic cost of 7.30$.
Conversaly
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Conversely
, Mexico
City
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Metro
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 have the
ceapest
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cheapest
 cost
which
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, which
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 is 0.23$.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words metro, city, subway, london, tube, length, journeys with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metro system
  • underground network
  • rail network
  • route length
  • number of stations
  • opened in
  • was established in
  • the oldest system
  • the newest network
  • the longest route
  • the shortest network
  • the highest figure
  • the lowest number
  • considerably longer
  • slightly higher
  • by contrast
  • whereas
  • respectively
  • a substantial difference
  • a similar number
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