2.You have moved to a new place. Write a letter to a friend giving reason why you moved to that place. Describe that place. Invite your friend to visit you.

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Dear Sharanpreet, I hope you're doing well! It's been a
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since we
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caught up,and I thought I'd write to you because
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have something exciting to share with you. As you know, recently I got
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job in Thunder Bay as Carpenter in Union,because of
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job i moved to Thunder Bay
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from Brampton.
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city is very quiet
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everything is very accessible in
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drive rather than Brampton.
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city is located in northern Ontario
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there are numerous natural places to explore
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like most. Property prices are very affordable
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encourage me to buy
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house. Next month my birthday is coming
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am going to organise a party at my new house,so schedule your plans
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because you will have to come
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you can explore my new place. Best regards, Guri

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Give a little more detail about why the new job made you move. For example, say why this job is good for you or why you chose this city.
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Describe the new place with more clear details, such as your house, the area, or a park near you.
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Make the invite more warm. Say when your friend can come, how long they can stay, and what you can do together.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Use full stops and spaces after commas to make it easier to read.
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Keep one main idea in each part. Put the job and move in one part, the city and house in the next, and the birthday invite in the last part.
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Use simple link words well, such as “Also”, “Because”, “For this reason”, and “I would love you to come”.
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You answer all main parts: why you moved, what the city is like, and an invite to visit.
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The birthday party is a friendly and clear reason for your friend to visit.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are suitable for a letter to a friend.
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The ideas are mostly in a good order: move, city, then invite.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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