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Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one.Do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Some people argue that working for a large
company
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 is better than
in
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working in
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 a small
one
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,
while
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 I agree with
this
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 viewpoint that working in
large
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a large
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company
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 is better than the small
,I
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one,I
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 think the small
company
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 is
also
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 important for some people’s
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carrier
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careers
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.
Body paragraph 1
One
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 reason is that large
companies
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 have many advantages for
employees
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,they can provide higher salary and medical insurance,
They
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they
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also
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 give the
employees
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 formal training more than
one
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 time,
that
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so that
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 the
employees
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could
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can
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 accept the advanced skills which is for their work at that moment and for their future
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carrier of
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career
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 development.Working in a large
company
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 is very helpful for
employees
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.
Body paragraph 2
The other reason is that working in a small
company
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also
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 has many advantages, the
employees
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 in small
companies
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 may take
different
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on different
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 kinds of
works
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work
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instead
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 of doing only
one
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 job,that the
employees
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can
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to
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 gain many kinds of practical skills.In small
companies
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,they may face
to
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apply
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their manager,so they can communicate with
manager
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the manager
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driectly
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directly
 and fluently.They work effectively as a small team,
the
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and the
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 atmosphere is very relaxed.
Conclusion
In conclusion,both working for large
companies
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 and in small ones have many merits.
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 the large
companies
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 can give the
employees
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the
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career
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carrier
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 goals,because the
employees
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 can gain the training and stable promotion from the large
companies
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.In
the
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apply
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small
companies
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,
the
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apply
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employees
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could
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can
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 try different kinds of
works
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work
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,
that
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which
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 can improve their practical skills
,they
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. They
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 will grow fast,
It
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which
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 is helpful for their future
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carrier plan
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career plans
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.So working in large
companies
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 is good for
employees
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’
carriers
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careers
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,the small
companies
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’
working
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work
 is not neglected.

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task response
Make your main view clear in the first part and keep it the same to the end. You say large firms are better, but much of the essay gives equal weight to small firms. State why large firms are better overall.
task response
Develop each main point with a clear reason and a short real or possible example. For example, say how training in a large firm can help a worker move to a new role.
task response
Give more detail about why the good points of small firms do not change your main view. This will make your answer more complete.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple plan: first part with your view, one body part on large firms, one body part on small firms, then a short end. Each body part should start with one clear main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid very long sentences joined by commas. Split them into two or three short sentences so the ideas are easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care, such as “First”, “However”, “For example”, and “Therefore”. Do not repeat “that the employees” too often; use “they” when the meaning is clear.
task response
You discuss both large and small firms, and your ideas about pay, health care, training, varied work, and direct contact with a manager are relevant.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear first part, two main body parts, and a final part. This gives the reader a basic path through your answer.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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