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The table below shows population figures for four countries for 2003 and projected figure for 2025 and 2050.

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The table below shows population figures for four countries for 2003 and projected figure for 2025 and 2050.
The table illustrates the
population
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 rate in four countries from 2003 to 2025 and 2050.
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, Indonesia had
much
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a much
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population
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larger population
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 than other countries in 2003.
Whereas
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,
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 Argentina had
least
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the least
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population
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 in the same year.
According to
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 the given information, Indonesia started
at
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with
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 238
million
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 citizens in 2003, which
was
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rose to 274
million
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 in 2025 and
in
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by
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 2050,
this
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figures
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figure
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 will increase to 312.
Moreover
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, in 2003, Italy
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stood at 54
million
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, which was 6
million
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 higher than
Republic
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the Republic
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 of
Korea' residence
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Korea's population
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.
Italy
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Italy's population
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population
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 was fell by 7
million
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 in 2025,
in
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and in
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 the
future
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future,
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 it would be 45
milion
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million
.
However
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,
Republic
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the Republic
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 of
korea
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Korea
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population
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 demonstrated
a upwards
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an upward
 trajectory,
transforming
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increasing
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 by 4
million
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 people in 2025. After 25
years
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years,
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 it will be remained same. As for Argentina, it witnessed an upward trend, 34
million
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at
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in
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 the initial year, which moderately increased to 48
million
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 in 2025
and
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, and
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this
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 will rise
62
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to 62
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million
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 in 2050.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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