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A friend is planning to visit your city. Write a letter to your friend. Invite your friend to stay with you. Suggest some places to visit. Explain what you can do together.

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Dear Jone, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to invite you to my house as I heard that you are going to visit my city. So, I will
very
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be very
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 happy to stay in my house to come
along with
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 a lot of places.
In
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addition
Add a comma
addition,
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 I need you to inform me about
your
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the
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 month and date that you are going to visit my city.
First,
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I would like to suggest some places to visit; Erbil
where
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, where
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 we can
have
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apply
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get surfing opportunities, try seafood, and get tan skin.
Second,
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museum, specifically in
Northern
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the northern
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 part of Iraq
to
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, to
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 explore and discover new cultures and norms of people there. Third, Mansour
park
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Park
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 to have our dinner and have a good chance to meet some celebrities there, like Canon.
Finally
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, let me know what you think. Best wishes, Saif

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task response
Answer all parts more clearly. Say that your friend can stay at your home, name the places, and say what you will do there together.
task response
Use clear and correct ideas. For example, write: “You can stay at my house.” Ask your friend to tell you the date of the visit.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each part. Start with the invite, then write about places, then write about your plans together.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words, such as “First”, “Also”, “Then”, and “Finally”. This will help the letter flow better.
coherence and cohesion
Some lines are hard to understand. Keep sentences short and check words like “I will be very happy for you to stay at my house.”
task response
You invite your friend and give a few places to visit.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a warm start and a clear ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use “First”, “Second”, and “Third” to show the order of your ideas.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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