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Your friend is thinking about learning to drive and would like some advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say why a driving licence is advantageous • recommend a driving school • give any extra guidance/tips You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear...,

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Dear John, I hope you're well. I'm glad to hear some news about you. My sister told me that you are planning to obtain your
driver
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driver's
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 license. I believe that's a great idea because
have
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 it
,
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apply
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give
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 you the freedom to go everywhere,
for
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example
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example,
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 whenever your parents can't pick you up, you
just will
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can
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 take the car and return
back
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apply
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home. To prepare for my driving test, I hired a small but really good company
, his
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. His
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 instructor was Jason, I pretty recommend it. I believe that without him
I
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, I
haven't
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 passed the exam. He is really flexible with the timetable, and is free on
thursdays
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, so we can hang
up
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out
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 on
friday
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Friday
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. He
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also will
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will also
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 teach you some tips,
for
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example
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 there is an exercise called "left something behind",
It
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it
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 is really tricky, but he made it so simple. Another important consideration is the stop signals
,
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 you must stop for 3 seconds, if not
you
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, you
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 will fail.
Jonh
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John
 will teach all that you need to know. Best wishes, Dani

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task response
Answer all three parts more clearly. Explain why a licence is useful, give the school name and why it is good, and add clear tips for John. Check names carefully: you write Jason and then Jonh.
task response
Use more natural sentences. Write “a driving licence”, “having one gives you freedom”, and “I highly recommend him”. Say what you mean by “hang up on Friday”.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph: the reason for a licence, the school, and driving tips. This will make the letter easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words such as “First”, “Also”, “For example”, and “Finally”. Avoid very long sentences with many ideas.
task response
You cover the main points: the good side of a licence, a teacher, and some test tips.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear opening and a friendly closing, so it feels like a letter to a friend.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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