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Newspapers will remain the main source of news in the future and the Internet will not have any effect. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Introduction
It is often argued that in the future
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the greatest
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 online
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 will not have any effect. I entirely disagree with
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 view because internet
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 more convenient and
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 global
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Body paragraph 1
The primary reason why
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 view is that online
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 more convenient.
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 main reason for
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 is that in today's era, a large proportion of people are
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 electronic devices.
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, they can easily access the latest
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 just by one click on their
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 gadgets. A good illustration of
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 is that now electronic devices like mobile phones
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 laptops are present in every
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, every person can easily access
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easily
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Another significant point is that digital platforms can provide
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global
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. The main reason for
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 is that internet contain the
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 from all around the world.
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, in
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 contemporary era,
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everyone
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 from every part of
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 easily. A good example of
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 is that online platforms contain
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 of
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knowledge
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nowadays
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 all
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topics easily.
Conclusion
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that
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 will provide the latest
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 in future
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task response
State your view clearly in the first part, then keep the same view to the end. You do this well, but make your reasons more fully clear.
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Develop each main point more. Explain how fast access to news changes what people choose to read, and why world news makes the Internet more useful than a paper.
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Use more real and clear examples. For example, say that a phone can show a live news report from another country at once, while a paper may have news from the day before.
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Be careful with very wide claims such as "every person" and "every house". Say "many people" or "in many homes" unless you can prove the claim.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear four-part plan: first part, two body parts, and an ending. Keep this plan in future essays.
coherence and cohesion
The links between ideas are clear, but some are used too often. Do not begin both body parts with the same pattern. Use a wider range, such as "Also", "More importantly", or "In contrast".
coherence and cohesion
Avoid saying the same idea many times in one part. In the first body part, "easily access" is repeated. State the point once, then add a new detail or example.
coherence and cohesion
Make each topic sentence answer the question more directly. For example: "Online news is likely to be the main source because it is available at any time."
coherence and cohesion
In the ending, sum up your two reasons in a short and direct way. Do not add new ideas there.
task response
You answer the question directly and clearly disagree with the statement.
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You give two relevant reasons: easy access and news from around the world.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are placed in a clear order, with one main idea in each body part.
coherence and cohesion
You use simple linking words such as "Therefore", "Consequently", and "As a result" to show cause and effect.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • main source of news
  • printed newspapers
  • online news platforms
  • instant access to information
  • live updates
  • breaking news
  • digital edition
  • mobile devices
  • social media feeds
  • reliable news source
  • verify information
  • misleading information
  • in-depth analysis
  • reader comments
  • declining circulation
  • digital subscription
  • traditional media
  • stay informed
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