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The graph and table below give information about the percentage of graduates in Australia who worked full-time after university from 2004 to 2012

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The graph and table below give information about the percentage of graduates in Australia who worked full-time after university from 2004 to 2012
The mixed chart depicts the date about the
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 of students in Australia working full-time after college between 2004 and 2012
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, the
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 of
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graduates
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 working full-time remained stable,
while
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 the figure for other
graduates
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 witnessed fluctuations.
Math
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graduates
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 earned higher salaries than other
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 after 2008,
whereas
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 their salaries were equal in 2004 and 2006. In 2004, the
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 of
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graduates
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 who worked full-time, at 80%, was higher than that of other
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, at 62%.
Then
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, the
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 of other
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 rose sharply to 88%, surpassing that of
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graduates
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, at 82%. From 2008 to 2012, both groups reached a similar level, at approximately at 85%, after that , the figure of
math
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graduates
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 increased to 75%,
while
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 other
graduates
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 decreased significantly to 60%.
Math
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graduates
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 had a higher rate than other
graduates
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 , and the gap widened to 15
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 points. Between 2004 and 2006, both groups earned the same salary, respectively $41,000 and $43,000. In 2008,
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graduates
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 earned $50000, $5000 more than other
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, at $45000. The gap widened to $4000, $51000 compared to $47000 in 2010. By 2012, the average salary of
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graduates
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 had reached $56,000, exceeding that of other
graduates
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 by $5,000, at $51,000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, math, graduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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