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The flow chart shows 'trampling', the negative effect of tourists walking in the countryside for the environment.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The flow chart shows 'trampling', the negative effect of tourists walking in the countryside for the environment.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The flow chart illustrates trampling,the negative effect of tourists walking in the countryside
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 the environment,showing the different stages involved in the process.
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,the process consists of several main stages,
begnning
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beginning
 with tampling and ending with erosion and decreased quality of
soil
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 and
vegetation
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At the first stage
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,
grass
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 is flattened under the feet of tourists walking in the area.
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,the
damged
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damaged
 branches into two primary effects.On one side,
vegetation
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damged
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damaged
 directly.
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,plants become weaker,
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 simultaneously,
plants
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 do not reproduce and grow.After that,both of these factors result in reduced
vegetation
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. On the other side,
soil
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 is compacted and becomes hard underfoot.In the following stage,there is
reduction
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 in air and water quality in the
soil
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 ,after which plants are
further
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 prevented from reducing and growing.
Subsequently
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,
this
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 leads to increased erosion and water running off the land,which
also
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countributes
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contributes
 to reduced
vegetation
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.
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,all of these steps result in erosion and decreased quality of
soil
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 and
vegetation
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words soil, vegetation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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