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The chart below gives information on the percentages of British people giving money to charity by range for the years 1990 and 2010.

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The chart below gives information on the percentages of British people giving money to charity by range for the years 1990 and 2010.
The bar chart provides the data in the ratio of British
people
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 who donate money to non-profit organisations by
age
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 group between 1990 and 2010.
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, it is clear from the graph that the donation rate considerably increased among five different
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 groups of
people
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 from 18 to 65+ between 1990 and 2010. The highest ratio was 36-50 years individuals in 1990,
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 the 18-25
age
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 group
people
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 were placed at the lowest position in 2010.
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, the contribution of elderly citizens, aged 51 to 65+ , gradually increased in 2010 compared to 1990. In 1990, among individuals aged 18 to 50 years, the contribution percentage rapidly escalated, which was just over 15, approximately 30, and above 40, respectively,
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this
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 ratio dramatically rose in 2010,
accordingly
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, almost above 5, nearly below 25, exactly 35, as well.
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 the portions in 2010 were significantly smaller than in 1990. Middle-aged
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 (36-50) donated the largest amount to the organization around 40% in 1990, compared to the early younger public (18-25), who provided the smallest number , more than 5% in 2010.
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, there was a decrease shown in the 50 to over 65
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 group
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however
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, comparing to others ,
this
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 time in 2010 followed the opposite trend and gave a greater amount than in 1990, which were nearly 40%, and almost 35%, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charity = help for people in need
  • percentage = part out of one hundred
  • age group = people of the same age range
  • give money = donate
  • rose = went up
  • fell = went down
  • highest = biggest
  • lowest = smallest
  • peak = highest point
  • by contrast = in a different way
  • overall = in general
  • more likely = had a higher chance
  • younger people = people with lower age
  • older people = people with higher age
  • the figure for = the number/percentage for
  • reach a peak = get to the highest point
  • decline = go down slowly
  • increase = go up
  • compared with = looked at next to
  • in both years = in 1990 and 2010
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