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The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart gives employment and education statistics for eight European countries in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The
barchart
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bar chart
 illustrates
employment
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 and
education
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 statistics for eight European
countries
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 in 2015.
Overall
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,
while
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Norway
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 has the highest
employment
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 and
education
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rate
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, it
also
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have
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has
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 the highest average annual
income
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. After
Norway
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, the UK and Austria
followed
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also followed
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also
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 with a
rate
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 over 70%. Bulgaria, Latvia, Luxembourg and Portugal had nearly a
similiar
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similar
rate
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 between 63% to 68%. The lowest
employment
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rate
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 between 16
to
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and
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 64 years
had
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was in
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 Greece with 50,8 %. The
education
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rate
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 of 25-64 year olds with a college or university
education
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 differs from the
employment
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rate
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. The top three
countries
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 were
Norway
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,
UK
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the UK
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 and Luxembourg. There
had
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were
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 slightly more than 40% a
colloege
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college
 or university degree. In
Portugal
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Portugal,
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 online 22.9% went to college or university, compared to the other seven
countries
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they
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, which
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 had the lowest
rate
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. Among the
countries
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, Lataia, Austria, Greece and Bulgaria, the
rate
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 was around 30%. Compared to the
employment
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rate
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, the ranking by
income
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 remained nearly the same. The highest average
income
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 in 2015
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Norway
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was in Norway
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stood
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at 41.483 €, in Luxembourg at 34.320€ and in Austria at 23.260€. The UK followed with 20.945€. The lowest average
income
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 had Bulgaria
witht
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with
 3.332 €. The middle
out
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apply
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of the average
income
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 stood at 5.800€ in
Lativa
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Latvia
, at 7.520€ in Greece and 8.435€ in
Protugal
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Portugal
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, education, countries, norway, rate, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Higher education attainment
  • Correlation
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Outliers
  • Economic factors
  • Cultural influences
  • Policy implications
  • Gender differences
  • Youth employment
  • Age-segmented
  • Statistics
  • Comparative analysis
  • Data interpretation
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