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In the future, nobody will buy printed books or newspapers because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying? To what extent, do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Introduction
It is widely recognised that in future, readers
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will
 not purchase printed
books
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 or newspapers because they will be able to
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 the internet.
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 issue has generated significant discussion regarding the advantages and drawbacks of
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 massive transformation. In my view, I agree with the concept of shifting from physical papers to
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internet documents.
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Body paragraph 1
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 argument about the huge numbers of
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netizens who
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 news and
books
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 online. The primary reason for
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platforms make reading
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 and magazines easier by sharing or affording
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 to buy online.
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, individuals don't need any more to purchase
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 from
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 or from bookshops. A clear illustration of
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 can be seen in the UK
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 many bookshops opened websites to sell
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 as a
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 file, which highlights the practical impact of
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 situation.
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, another crucial factor to consider is the financial damage
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 various types
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libraries
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of libraries
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.
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 as students and
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 stopped
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visiting
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.
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, a lot of
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 closed their doors.
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, recent studies in
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 decreased
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from 35,600
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 in 1970 to 10,000 in 2026.
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libraries
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 obstacle, it is equally important to acknowledge the
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 as
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 easier and smoother way of reading. Ultimately, I firmly agree that digital newspapers and
books
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 are
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 source of data than the physical papers.

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task response
Make your view clearer from the start. You agree that online reading will grow, but the question says nobody will buy printed books or papers. Say if you agree fully or only in part, and keep this view through the essay.
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Answer the part about free online reading more directly. Explain that some news is free, but many books, papers, and online sites still ask readers to pay.
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Develop each main idea with a clear why and result. For example, online reading is easy because people can read at once on a phone; however, printed books may still be bought by people who like paper or do not want to use a screen.
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Use examples that are easy to trust. The numbers about US libraries are very exact but are not explained. A simple real-life example, such as paid news sites or people buying books as gifts, may work better.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simpler plan: introduction with your view, one paragraph for reasons people will read online, one paragraph for reasons printed books may remain, then a short conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Make the second body paragraph match the question more closely. It is mainly about libraries closing, while the question is about people buying printed books and newspapers.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a clear way. Use words such as 'First', 'Also', 'However', 'For example', and 'Therefore'. Do not use a long opening sentence that says the essay will look at both sides if your own view is already clear.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. The first body paragraph moves between free reading, buying online, libraries, and bookshops. Choose one point and explain it fully before moving on.
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You give a clear general view that online books and news are useful and easy to get.
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You try to include an example to support each body paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear beginning, two main body paragraphs, and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use some helpful linking words, such as 'To begin with', 'On the other hand', 'Consequently', and 'In conclusion'.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • printed books
  • newspapers
  • online reading
  • digital content
  • paywall
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-saving
  • environmental impact
  • traditional reading experience
  • ownership
  • personal connection
  • reliability
  • credibility
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
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