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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation

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Introduction
Owning a
house
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 is
a
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of
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 major significance in some societies in certain countries.
Body paragraph 1
Renting a
house
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 doesn't make it a home
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moreover
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, a person should consider the
fainancial
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financial
 changes that might occur in the future .
Body paragraph 2
The benefit of buying a
house
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 is that it gives
a
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apply
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great relief
knowing
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, knowing
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 that even in difficult
circumstances
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circumstances,
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 there will be a roof over one's head .Owning a
house
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 is crucial to maintain a stable life
a
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. A
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 study shows that 70% of people who
owns
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own
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 a
house
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 have
less
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lower
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 stress levels by 57% than those who use renting.
Body paragraph 3
Having a stable residence can save
money
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 and cut down on the expenses,
for example
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 poeple who have
family
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a family
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 could spend their rent
money
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 on a better education for their children or establish a family business rather
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then
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than
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 wasting
such
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 a big amount of
money
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 each month or year .
Conclusion
In conclusion, I believe that owning a
house
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 is more beneficial than renting
it
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, as it
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 gives
a
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apply
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financial stability and saves
money
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task response
Answer both parts more fully. Explain why home ownership is important, such as safety, family plans, and fear of rent going up. Then clearly say why you think it is good or bad.
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Make your main view clear from the start. You say owning a home is better, but you should also explain one possible bad side, such as large debt or high house costs, before giving your final view.
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Use examples that are clear and real. The family and school example is useful. Explain it more: say how owning a home may help a family plan its money for many years.
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Do not use a study or number unless you can explain it well. The line about stress is hard to follow. A simple example is better than an unclear number.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear four-part plan: introduction, reasons for owning, your view with an example, and conclusion. This will help the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body part with one clear main idea. For example: "One reason is that a home gives people safety." Then add an explanation and an example.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words such as "also", "because", "for example", "however", and "therefore". Avoid putting two ideas together without a clear link.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are not clear or complete. For example, "Renting a house doesn't make it a home" needs more explanation. Say why renting may feel less safe or less permanent.
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You give a clear main view that owning a home can bring safety and help people save money.
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Your example about parents using money for their children’s school is relevant and helps support your view.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an opening, two main idea parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use an example to move from a general idea about money to a family situation.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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