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You are attending a course at an evening school. Write a letter to the director of the school with a complaint about the course. In your letter, you should: – Describe the course you are taking. – Explain what you don’t like about the course. – Give your opinion about what should be done about it.

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Dear
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 Stephen, I hope you are doing well. My name is Ulfi, and
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 am a student in an art program.
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 am writing to inform you that, recently, the system was not run consistently
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 deeply uncomfortable with the schedule that always changes every advancement. The issue was felt by other students
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 result, we were unable to enhance our skills properly, and I hope
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 would appreciate it
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 adjust high standard profesional prosedure in the school. Parhaps add several teachers to our class might become one of the solutions. I sincerely
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. Thank you very much for considering my request. I look forward to your understanding, and I hope to hear from you. Yours sincerely, Dia'Ulfi

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Say the course name and give clear facts, such as the days, time, and class level. Explain the main problem in a clear way: teachers are away and the class plan keeps changing.
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Give clear results of the problem. For example, say that students miss lessons and cannot learn new art skills.
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Ask for clear action. You could ask the school to find cover teachers, keep one class plan, and tell students about changes early.
coherence and cohesion
Use one main point in each part: course details first, problems next, then what you want the school to do.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words to show the order of ideas, such as “First”, “As a result”, and “For this reason”.
coherence and cohesion
Check full sentences. For example, write “I am deeply unhappy with the schedule changes,” not “I deeply uncomfortable”.
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You give a clear reason for writing and talk about the changing class plan.
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You suggest a possible answer: adding more teachers.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a polite start and end, and it is easy to see the three main parts.
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You use polite words such as “I would appreciate it” and “Thank you”.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • evening course
  • intermediate-level class
  • weekly timetable
  • professional development
  • poorly organised lessons
  • start lessons late
  • practical learning activities
  • read directly from slides
  • individual feedback
  • overcrowded classroom
  • insufficient learning materials
  • outdated equipment
  • course content
  • teaching standard
  • qualified instructor
  • smaller class sizes
  • improve the facilities
  • take immediate action
  • look into this matter
  • a prompt response
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