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the development of tourism conributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world.

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Introduction
As more
people
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 travel abroad ,
English
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 has gained a central role in communication across the world .
Therefore
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 , many
people
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 believe that it could eventually replace all other languages . From my point of view , just one common
language
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 could support global development .
However
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 , it may
also
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 result in cultural and
liguistic
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linguistic
 loss.
Body paragraph 1
One of the main advantages of using a single
language
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 worldwide is that
people
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 can communicate easily. When
people
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 travel abroad , they can talk to local
people
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 more easily and ask for help .
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 , tourists can ask for directions or book a hotel room without facing
language
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 barriers .
In addition
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 , a common
language
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 can help students to access
educatinal
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educational
 resources from
diffrent
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different
 countries more easily.
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, they can read books from other nations and take online courses without learning another
language
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.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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 ,using a single
language
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 worldwide could lead to the loss of other
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language
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 and cultural traditions. If younger generations use only
English
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, they may not learn their native languages or may stop using them.
As a result
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 ,traditional stories and customs may not be passed on
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 future generations.
In addition
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 , using
English
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 as the only global
language
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 could create unequal opportunities for
nan-native
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non-native
English
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 speakers in education and
employement
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employment
. They may need to spend extra money and time
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improving their
language
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 skills to compete with native speakers.
Conclusion
In conclusion , one common
laguage
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language
 can make communication easier and improve access to education
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 it may
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 lead to cultural loss and create inequality for non-native
English
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 speakers.

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task response
You answer both parts of the question. To make your ideas stronger, explain more clearly why one world language may help world growth, not only travel and study.
task response
Your main points are clear: easy talk, better study, loss of language, and unfair chances. Add one more real or clear example for the last point about work and school.
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Be careful with the idea that English may replace every language. You can say that this is possible in some parts of life, while home languages may still be used.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear order: opening, good points, bad points, and ending. Each body part has one main focus, so it is easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a more natural way. You use “For example”, “In addition”, and “As a result” well, but do not put too many in the same way. You can also use “This means that” to link an example to your main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Make the last sentence of each body part show the main result more clearly. This will help the reader see how each point answers the question.
coherence and cohesion
Check small word errors that can slow the reader, such as “language” instead of “laguege”, “educational”, “different”, “native”, and “employment”.
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You give a fair answer with both good and bad sides of one common language.
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The examples about travel, hotel rooms, books, and online classes are clear and fit your main ideas.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction clearly states your view and names the two main sides you will discuss.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion brings both sides together and directly answers the question.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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