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You recently attended a conference and you would like to give a presentation about the information you gained by attending the conference. Write a letter to your manager asking for permission to give a presentation. In your letter: describe what type of presentation you have in mind what topics it would cover and how long it would take who should participate in the presentation and where should it be conducted

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Dear
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 Hashemi, I am writing to request permission to give a
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 the conference I recently attended. I believe the information I gained could significantly help other employees improve their productivity in the workplace. Since the
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 focuses on artificial intelligence and its impact on business, I would prefer to deliver it in person. A face-to-face format would allow me to answer questions and encourage active participation, making the session more engaging and informative for colleagues. The
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 on artificial intelligence and how it can help employees perform their tasks more efficiently. It will require two to three days, with four hours each day, to cover all the material I wish to present. I believe September 22, 23, and 25 would be ideal dates, as the company's workload is generally low during that period, making it easier for employees to attend.
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 would be especially valuable for staff in the Customer Service Department, as the insights could positively impact their performance and enhance the quality of service we provide to our clients. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Mohammadreza Hadavi

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Say where the talk will take place. For example, ask to use the main meeting room.
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Make the plan shorter and more clear. A two- or three-day talk may be hard for staff to join.
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Link the last main point to your request. For example, say why this group should join and what they will learn.
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Use clear order words, such as “First”, “Next”, and “Finally”, to guide the reader through the plan.
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You cover the kind of talk, the main topic, the time, and the staff who should join.
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Your tone is polite and right for a letter to a manager.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, main part, and close.
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Each main part has one clear job, so the letter is easy to follow.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • presentation
  • conference
  • information
  • topics
  • attend
  • participate
  • conducted
  • insights
  • key
  • trends
  • opportunities
  • team
  • manager
  • express
  • desire
  • benefit
  • share
  • suggest
  • room
  • atmosphere
  • questions
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