You are going to teach English to your friend’s child. Write a letter to your past English teacher to ask if you can borrow some books from him/her. In your letter tell your teacher about the child. say when and where you will teach the child. explain what books you would like to borrow.

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Dear Mr Hashemi, I am writing to request your assistance in my new professional journey, which is teaching English to my friend's child. My friend's child is ten years old, and his English level is A1. As he wants to participate in the IELTS Exam, I have to help him achieve an
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band score of 7 in two months.
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, I am reaching out to you to give me some advice on
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matter. I will teach the child from September 25, every day for 2 hours at my friend's home.
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, I have
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considered some online classes for him to improve his confidence, particularly since the speaking part of the exam will be via online platforms, which I think can be demanding for him compared with face-to-face speaking tests. I would really appreciate it if you could provide me with some advice on the books I need. I would
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be grateful if you could give me some of them, particularly the Cambridge IELTS series and Collins' speaking book. I would appreciate your assistance in
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matter. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Mohammadreza Hadavi Bavil

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task response
Ask more clearly to borrow the books. Say when you will bring them back. Also, the child is very young and at a low level, so the IELTS plan does not sound real. You could ask for easy books first.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order, but some parts are too long. Keep one main point in each paragraph. For example, put the child and his level in one paragraph, and the class time and place in the next.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words such as “also”, “so”, and “because” to join ideas. Do not repeat “I would appreciate” too many times.
task response
You tell the teacher about the child, the class time and place, and the books you want. The main purpose of the letter is clear.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a good start and end. Your paragraphs are easy to follow, and the greeting and closing fit the letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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