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More and more people are working from home. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Introduction
The growing popularity of working from
home
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 has led to much discussion about its benefits and drawbacks.
Although
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this
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 trend has some disadvantages, I believe that the advantages are more significant.
Body paragraph 1
The main advantage of working from
home
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 is that it saves employees both time and money.
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 is because they no longer need to travel to the office every day.
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, they spend less on fuel, public transport and lunches outside.
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, a worker who spends two hours a day in traffic can use that time to rest, exercise or spend it with their family.
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, employees are often less stressed and more productive in their
work
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. Companies
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 benefit, because they can save money on large office buildings and hire skilled workers from other cities or even other countries.
Body paragraph 2
However
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,
this
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 trend
also
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 has some drawbacks. The main disadvantage is that remote workers may feel isolated from their colleagues.
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, some people find it difficult to separate their
work
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 from their
home
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 life.
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, they miss the informal conversations that help people build friendships and share ideas at
work
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.
Nevertheless
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,
this
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 problem is less important because companies can easily solve it with regular online meetings and occasional days in the office, which allow staff to meet in person and maintain good working relationships.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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 working from
home
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 has some disadvantages, I believe its advantages are greater.
This
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 is mainly because it gives employees more time, lower costs and a better balance between
work
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 and family life.

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task response
You answer the question clearly and keep the same view from start to end. To make the answer even stronger, add one more real or clear example of how a company saves money or finds good staff from far away.
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Your main ideas are clear: workers save time and money, while some may feel alone or find it hard to stop work. You could say a little more about why the good points are more important than the bad points for most workers and firms.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear four-part plan: start, good points, bad points, and end. Each paragraph has one main job, so it is easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
You use linking words well, such as “In addition”, “For example”, “However”, and “Nevertheless”. Try not to use “The main advantage” and “The main disadvantage” in the same way every time; use a few other simple links to make the flow feel more natural.
coherence and cohesion
The last sentence of the second body part gives a good answer to the bad point. You can make this link even clearer by saying that online meetings may help, but they may not fully give the same feeling as meeting people at work.
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Your view is clear in the first paragraph and is repeated well in the final paragraph: the good points are stronger than the bad points.
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The example of a worker spending two hours in traffic is useful and directly supports your point about time, stress, and family life.
coherence and cohesion
The ideas move in a clear order, and the reader can easily see the good points, the bad points, and your final view.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion sums up the key ideas without adding a new point, which gives the essay a strong ending.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • social experience
  • cultural experience
  • variety
  • food choices
  • relief
  • cooking responsibilities
  • cost
  • health concerns
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