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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter * explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday * describe some possible dasadvantages * say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Hi Darshan, You look so excited for your camping
trip
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! Is
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 the 1st time you are going camping? If so, you have chosen the right place, the Polo forest. Polo Forest is the best place for people who are not used to camping, or for folks who are afraid of heights. You will love making new memories with strangers who will be your new friends during
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trip
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. When I went to Polo forest the
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 summer, there used to be a small river and beautiful hiking tracks with some great natural views. Among all of them, the top view, facing right towards the small horse statue, is breathtaking. The best part about camping is the nighttime, the time of placing your own tent.
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trip
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 is fabulous, you might meet with some folks who ruin everyone's experience with their loud music at night. I hope you don't need to face it. I would love to come, but
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 my hectic schedule, I will not be able to join you.
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, please keep updating me on video calls about your
trip
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 activities. Ahh, don't forget to enjoy the campfire. Enjoy! See you after the
trip
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. Saumil

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task response
Answer the last point more directly. Say if you would like to go, then explain why you cannot go this summer.
task response
Give a little more clear advice for a first trip, such as taking warm clothes, food, water, and a light.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, main part, and end. Make the first reason clearer: explain in one short line why Polo Forest is a good place for a new camper.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. Put the good parts of camping in one paragraph, the bad parts in the next, and your own plan in the last one.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words such as “Also”, “However”, and “Because” to make the ideas flow more smoothly.
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You cover all the main points: why camping can be fun, one possible problem, and your plan for the summer.
coherence and cohesion
The letter feels friendly and personal. The greeting, questions, and closing suit a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
Your details about the river, hiking, views, tents, and campfire make the letter interesting and easy to picture.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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