The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

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IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

The

process

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diagram illustrates the

process

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of how industrial

sugar

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made

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is made

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from

sugar

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cane

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Overall

Linking Words

this

Linking Words

process

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have

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has

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seven major steps, starting from

sugar

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cane

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plantation and

endign

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ending

with drying and cooling the processed

sugar

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. As the first step of the

process

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sugar

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, sugar

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cane

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plants

plant

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are planted

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sugar

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cane

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farmers and

allow it

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allowed

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to grow

another

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for another

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12 to 18

month period

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months

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untill

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until

those plants mature to

harvest

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be harvested

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. Once

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this

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these

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plants sucessfully grows, farmers haverst those

sugar

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canes by using

labours

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labourers

industral suagr

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industrial sugar

cane

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harvest matchines.

Linking Words

This

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These

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harvested crops

send

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are sent

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to factories to extract juice by

crusing

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crushing

with specialised

matchines

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machines

. Extracted juice purified with limestone filters and

send

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sent

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through evaporator

matchine

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machine

crystalised

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crystallise

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the purified

sugar

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juice. After that step,

sugar

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crystals separate from the

crystalised

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crystallised

sugar

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syrup by using specialized matchine named

centrifuge

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a centrifuge

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. Once

this

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has

done

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been done

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separated

sugar

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cristals dry and

cooling

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cool

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by using

cooling

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a cooling

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matchine

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machine

before

distirbute

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distributing

to its consumers.

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Oct 26, 2026

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, sugar, cane with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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2
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
27
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

5.5

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

153 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

sugar cane
harvesting
manufacturing process
cleaning
sanitation
quality control
crushing
extracted juice
boiling
concentrated syrup
crystallization
sugar crystals
separation
molasses
purity
quality
food processing

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The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

1 Write a letter to your friend, who is also joining the trip. Write about your feelings and what you think the teacher should plan for the trip. Write about 50 words.

It is better to live in a big city than a small town. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Demand for oil and gas is increasing and so finding new sources in remote and untouched areas is a necessity. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?