You want to join a library in another part of your city. Write a letter to the library. Explain why you want to join. Ask about membership fees. Ask about opening hours.

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Dear Sir, I am writing to request a library membership because I recently moved to your city to complete documents at the engineering department. I want to join your library for
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purpose, and I will only need it for about 20 days.
First,
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could you please tell me about the membership fee for twenty days? Could you please tell me the borrowing fees? Could you please tell me what the fine is for losing the books?
Second,
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for your information, I can go to the library from 2:00 pm to 4:00 pm. Could you please let me know the opening and closing times so I can manage my schedule
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?
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, I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Saif

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task response
Explain more clearly why the library will help with your work at the engineering department. For example, say that you need books, a quiet place, or a computer.
task response
Ask about the fee in one clear question. “Could you please tell me the fee for a short membership of about 20 days?” is enough. Also ask if there are fees for borrowing books and for lost books.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: reason for writing, questions about fees, and questions about times. To make it flow better, link the ideas with words such as “Also” and “In addition” instead of using “First” and “Second” only.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph focused on one main point. The paragraph about fees works well, but the sentence “for your information” is not needed before asking about opening times.
task response
You answer all the main parts of the task: why you want to join, membership fees, and opening hours.
coherence and cohesion
The letter uses a good formal start and end, and the paragraphs are easy to follow.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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