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The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart and table below show the results of a survey of library users at a university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart represents the percentage of different types of people who use a
library
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 at university,
while
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 the table
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the information of satisfaction of
library
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 users.
Overall
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, the biggest part of
university
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the university
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library
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are
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is
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 full-time undergraduate students. In fact, many people are very satisfied with
library
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 opening hours, wifi, books and other
type
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types
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 of staff. Based on the diagram, full-time undergraduates make up the biggest part of the categories
and
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 it is about 44%. Full-time postgraduate takes the second place
at
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in
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 the categories
diagrama
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diagram
 and make up near 25%. The smallest group is an academis staff
that is
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 7% from all types.
According to
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 the table,
helpfulness
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the helpfulness
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 of staff
make
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makes
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 the
biggest
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greatest
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 satisfaction for people
it
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,
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 based on information that 95% are very satisfied and 0% are not.
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However
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However,
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 users of
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library
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the library
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most
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are most
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 unhappy with
availability
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the availability
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 of journals, 45% are very happy
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while
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, while
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 20% are not.
Finaly
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Finally
, 50% are very satisfied
for
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with
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 the availability of books, 40%are fairly satisfied
and
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, and
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 10% are not.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • library users
  • survey results
  • the chart shows
  • the table gives
  • the largest group
  • the smallest group
  • a high number
  • a low number
  • more than
  • less than
  • about the same
  • in general
  • overall
  • by contrast
  • while
  • compared with
  • positive view
  • negative view
  • service quality
  • study space
  • opening hours
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