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some people believe that technology has made our lives easier, while others think it has made our lives more complicated Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Introduction
Nowadays,
Technology
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 is widely spreading in the world. So everyone uses it, which makes
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lives
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 easier for some of them,
whereas
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 a group of
people
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 argue that
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 is harmful and damages their
lives
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. From my perspective, using
technology
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 helps us a lot and makes our
lives
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 more convenient.
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, we should use it
wisely as much
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 as we can.
Body paragraph 1
Some
people
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 claim that
technology
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 makes their life easier and saves their time
especially,
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, especially
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 if they have arrogant works or
assignment
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assignments
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 and they need to finish
it up
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 in
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 time.
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,
technology
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 helps teachers to provide an attractive lesson for the students and
enjoyable
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, which
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 makes students interact more and take the lesson
in their account
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Technology
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 is not limited to work, but extends even to shopping. So, online shopping
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 makes our
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 easier because
people
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 who do not have enough time to go to the shop can easily order online and have it delivered to their homes.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, individuals who believe that
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 makes their
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 difficult and challenging
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 a lack of knowledge, because they do not know how to use
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 at all, find that it makes their
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 complicated.
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, some of them argue that
technology
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 takes everything from them, which means that they stop thinking or doing things, maybe
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 their total dependence on
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. Once
people
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 make
technology
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 do everything for them, it will damage their
lives
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 and make everything go up and down.
Conclusion
In conclusion, the majority of
people
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 believe that
technology
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 has an important role in our
lives
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, especially in recent years;
however
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, others do not agree with them, and I think all these opinions are right because it depends on how they use
technology
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.

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Task response
You discuss both views and give your own view. Make your own view more clear from the start, and keep it the same in the end. At present, you say technology helps us, but later you say all views are right.
Task response
Explain the view that technology makes life hard in more detail. For example, talk about people who cannot use online bank or health care sites, or about too much phone use.
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Use clear, real examples to support each main point. Your online shopping example is useful. Add one clear example for work, school, and the problems of over-use.
Coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear order: introduction, one view, the other view, and conclusion. Keep one main idea in each paragraph and build it with an explanation and an example.
Coherence and cohesion
Some links between ideas are not clear. Use simple links such as “For example”, “As a result”, “However”, and “In contrast” only when they show the exact link.
Coherence and cohesion
Make some sentences more direct. For example, write: “Technology saves time when people have a lot of work and must finish it by a set time.” This is clearer than “arrogant works” and “finish it up in specific time.”
Coherence and cohesion
In the final paragraph, state one firm final view. For example: “In my view, technology makes life easier overall, but people should not depend on it for every task.”
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You answer all parts of the question by showing why technology can make life easier and why it can also cause problems.
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The online shopping point is clear and relevant: it shows how technology can save time and help people who cannot go to a shop.
Coherence and cohesion
The essay is easy to follow because each body paragraph has a different view.
Coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both present, and they show your main idea about wise use of technology.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • streamlined processes
  • constant connectivity
  • learning and adaptation
  • enhance convenience
  • accessible services
  • remote work
  • flexible schedules
  • work-life balance
  • evolving nature
  • 'always on' culture
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