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The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart provides information about the
amount
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number
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 of
giving
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births
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birth
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 in Australia by
other
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six other
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six nationalaties
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nationalities
,
while
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table
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the table
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 illustrates the place where these six nations were born.
Overall
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, there
is
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are
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 not many residents who decided to live with
childs
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children
, only people who
born
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were born
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 there give more
birth
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 to the
country
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.
It is clear that
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 citizens from Australia maintain the
heighest
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highest
 level of giving
birth
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 in their own
country
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, accounting for 73%, where 83% childs born in the big cities, and 17% of them in suburban parts of the
country
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.
Also
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, people who came from other countries, without giving clear information about
theur
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their
 nationality, demonstrates as a 14%. As for those who chose to live with the least number of
childs
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children
.
Individuals from
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In the
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 UK, there are 7% of
them are
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individuals
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 living in Australia, and only 17% decided to stay outside the huge cities.
Also
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, residents who came from China
,
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apply
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 mainly choose to live without babies, because 3% of them gave
birth
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 here.
Moreover
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, only 1% of Chinese people
,
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apply
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 live in the outskirts of the
country
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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