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The best way to make roads safer is to make vehicle drivers take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
It is often argued that the best way to improve
road
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safety
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 is to require drivers to retake driving tests annually.
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this
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 view has some merit, I partly agree with
this
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 opinion because tests can help, but they are not the best way on their own.
Body paragraph 1
One crucial reason why I agree with
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 view is that a regular driving fitness assessment can be beneficial to public
safety
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. Retaking a driving test regularly
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a medical examination, which indicates a person's capability. If the driver is afflicted with certain physical limitations that affect driving ability, the
driving
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 license should be revoked.
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, a senior citizen was deemed incapable of driving
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due to
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 declining eyesight that influences alertness.
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, the requirement of taking tests might have some
disatventages
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disadvantages
,
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 as it may cost a lot and take
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 time.
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, it is
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 true that the
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 conditions play a crucial role in reducing
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 accidents. When the
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 is not congested on
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 well-lit and broad roads , these make people less restless about their
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. These help to
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organise
 the
traffic
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 easily.
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, the heavy
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 in Bangladesh put pedestrians’ lives at risk,
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 the lack of
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 signs, speed limits and
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 marking. Without
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general rules and signs,
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 as a crosswalk,
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 lights and enough space for cars , there is likely to be mayhem in cities.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I believe that making drivers retake drinking lessons regularly
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plays an essential role as much as the
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 conditions. I agree that these ideas are good,
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however
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the
road
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 conditions play a more crucial role in
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,
due to
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benefits
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 for drivers and pedestrians.

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task response
Make your main view more direct. You say you partly agree, but your last paragraph says road conditions are more important. State this same view clearly at the start and keep it through the whole essay.
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Explain why yearly tests are not the best way in more detail. For example, say that many crashes come from bad roads, poor signs, or weak law checks, so tests alone cannot stop them.
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Use examples that fully support your point. The example about Bangladesh is useful, but explain how better signs, lights, and road marks would make people safer.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clearer plan: first explain the good side of yearly tests, then explain why road safety also needs better roads and rules, and then restate your view.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words such as “However”, “Also”, “For this reason”, and “As a result”. Make sure each sentence follows naturally from the one before it.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid ideas that are not clear or do not fit. For example, “drinking lessons” should be “driving tests” or “driving lessons”. Check that key words stay the same from start to end.
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You answer both sides of the question: yearly driving tests can help, but road conditions also matter.
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You give real and relevant examples, including older drivers with poor eyesight and unsafe roads in Bangladesh.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear opening, two main body parts, and a closing paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
You use some helpful signpost words, such as “While”, “However”, “For example”, and “In conclusion”.
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