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Men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities. For this reason, some jobs are better done by men and others by women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
It is often argued that certain
jobs
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 are better suited to men,
while
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 others are more suitable for women because of
differences
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 in their characteristics and
abilities
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. I partially agree with
this
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 view because physical
differences
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 may influence performance in some
occupations
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, but the importance of individual
skills
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 and
qualifications
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 should not be underestimated.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, those who support assigning certain
jobs
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according to
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gender
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 argue that physical
differences
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 can influence job performance. Their reasoning stems from the belief that some physically demanding
occupations
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 require considerable strength and endurance.
For instance
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,
jobs
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 involving heavy lifting and physically demanding tasks may be easier for individuals with greater physical strength. If employers considered the physical requirements of particular
jobs
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, they could ensure that workers were capable of performing their duties safely and efficiently.
As a result
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, the importance of considering physical
abilities
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 in certain
occupations
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 should not be underestimated.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, I believe that individual
skills
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 and
qualifications
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 should not be overlooked.
This
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 is particularly important because most
occupations
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 require professional knowledge, practical experience and effective communication
skills
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 rather than specific
gender
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 characteristics.
For example
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, both men and women can become successful doctors, teachers and engineers if they receive appropriate education and professional training. If employers selected candidates based on their
qualifications
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 and
abilities
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 rather than
gender
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, more individuals would have access to equal employment opportunities.
Therefore
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, evaluating employees
according to
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 their individual
abilities
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 would be a more sensible approach.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
although
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 physical
differences
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 may influence performance in certain
occupations
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, I remain convinced that selecting employees based on their individual
skills
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 and
qualifications
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 rather than
gender
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 would be a more sensible approach.

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task response
Your view is clear: you partly agree. To make it stronger, explain more clearly which jobs may need more physical power and why this matters. Also say more about why this point should not decide most jobs.
task response
Your main ideas are on topic, but some points are quite general. Add one real and clear example, such as fire work, building work, or work in a hospital, to show how skill can matter more than sex.
task response
Be careful not to sound as if all men or all women have the same skills. Say that people are different, and that each person should be checked for the needs of the job.
coherence and cohesion
The essay is easy to follow. Keep this clear plan: give your view, explain the other side, explain your main view, and end with your view.
coherence and cohesion
Some ideas are repeated, such as the need to consider physical ability. You can make the writing tighter by adding a new reason or a more exact example instead of saying the same point again.
coherence and cohesion
Your linking words are used well. You could also link the last sentence of each body part more directly to your main view, so the whole essay feels even more connected.
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You answer all parts of the question and give a clear partly agree view from the start to the end.
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The examples of doctors, teachers, and engineers are relevant and help show that both men and women can do many jobs well.
coherence and cohesion
Each body part has one main idea, and the order of ideas is clear and easy to understand.
coherence and cohesion
The opening and ending match well, and the ending clearly restates your main view.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • innate
  • biological differences
  • characteristics
  • gender roles
  • stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • gender biases
  • fair representation
  • skills
  • qualifications
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