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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000.

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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000.
The bar graph depicts the information about the gross domestic product in the UK under
IT
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the IT
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 and service industry over
a
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an
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 8-
year
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 period from 1992 to 2000.
Overall
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, it is crystal clear from the graph that the IT
sector
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 accounted for
much
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a much
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 larger proportion of GDP than
service
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the service
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sector
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, and in the
last
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year
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, the
prior
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former
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sector
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's growth rate was almost doubled from the
later
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latter
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 one. Taking a closer look at the above-mentioned chart, the information technology area showed
gradual
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a gradual
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 increase throughout the period
starting
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, starting
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 from 6 per cent in 1992 and more than 8% in the next two years
,
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however
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, a little dip was observed in the
year
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 1996.
This
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 was followed by a steady rise, with the figure reaching about 15% in 2000.
By contrast
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, the tertiary industry started off slowly, with only 4% GDP, but it significantly
grows
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 in the upcoming years. Though
,
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apply
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 it remained between 6
to
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and
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 8 per cent
,
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apply
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from the
year
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 1994 to 2000, and it reached
it
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its
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 apex in the
last
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year
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 with slightly more than 8% of growth.
Consequently
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, it was way less than the IT
sector
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sector, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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