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The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart depicts information about the most
likable
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 subjects of learners from
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school
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 A and
school
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B
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, it is crystal clear from the chart that
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 the most
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 topic of the
school
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B
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 is drawing,
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it is the least
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 in the
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 likes sports the most. Taking a closer look at the
above mentioned
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above-mentioned
 bar graph, approximately 10% of
elementry
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elementary
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school
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likes
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 maths,
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 double the proportion of children liked it in another educational institution.
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, science is the least liked
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from the
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school
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,
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 for less than 5%. After that, literature is the second most liked topic for the
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, with nearly 40 per cent
likings
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 prior
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 are keen to learn it.
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 to that, drawing is very popular among middle schoolers, and 1/2 of the total voted for the
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 less than 10 per cent
students
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 considered drawing as their
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subject
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, a drastic difference is seen between the students of both
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schools concerning sports, as more than 70% of the
school
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 A choose it as their
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subject
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, and 10% learners of the
school
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B
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 were into sports.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, b, favourite, subject with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • comparative data
  • favorite subjects
  • middle schools
  • horizontal axis
  • vertical axis
  • quantifies
  • preference
  • initial observation
  • significantly greater interest
  • shared enthusiasm
  • favored
  • attracts more students
  • draws the highest number
  • popularity
  • outliers
  • subject preferences
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