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Many people believe that cooking is an essential life skill and should be taught to boys and girls at school. Others disagree and believe that it is a waste of school time. Discuss both Views and give Your opinion

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Introduction
First of all, cooking is good for our health, and bodies
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 cannot cook often depend on fast food, instant noodles, and delivery apps. These meals are usually high in salt
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 and sugar. If students learn how to cook, they are more likely to eat healthy food when they are older.
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, cooking helps
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 become more independent. When they go to university or start their first job, because they need to feed themselves, cooking at home is cheaper than eating out, so it helps them save money.
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, teaching boys and girls togather are important. In the past, cooking classes were often only for girls. Now, some
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 believe that cooking is everyone's job, and school is the best place to share
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on other hand, many
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 argue and believe schools do not have enough time for
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 in their opinion, students already have a lot to learn in subjects
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 like maths
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 and science.
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 cooking should be taught at home, and parents are the best teachers for
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 kind of skill.
Conclusion
In my view, cooking should be taught at home; not every family has time to teach their children how to cook, so school makes
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 available for everyone.

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task response
Discuss both views in a more even way. You give more reasons for cooking at school than for the other view. Add a full paragraph to explain why some people think home is the best place to learn.
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Make your own view clear at the end. Your last sentence says cooking should be taught at home, but the next part says school should make it open to all. Say clearly if you support school lessons, home lessons, or both.
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Give one clear example. For example, a student who can cook rice, eggs, and vegetables may eat less fast food and spend less money.
coherence and cohesion
Add a short opening that says you will look at both views and give your view. This helps the reader see the plan from the start.
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Use clear paragraph links: “On the one hand” for school cooking, “On the other hand” for the home view, and “In conclusion” for your final view.
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Keep one main idea in each paragraph. The paragraph about young people going to university has two ideas: being able to live alone and saving money. You can join them with a clear link or split them.
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Use the same words carefully. Write “young people” instead of “young community”, and “people” instead of “many community”.
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You answer both sides of the topic and give reasons for teaching cooking, such as health, being able to live alone, and saving money.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are put in a clear order with words such as “First of all”, “Secondly”, “Finally”, and “In addition”.
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Most paragraphs have one main point, so the reader can follow your meaning easily.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Life skill
  • Independence
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Nutrition
  • Healthy eating
  • Practical skills
  • Core subjects
  • Artisanal
  • Creativity
  • Culinary education
  • Cultural appreciation
  • Meal preparation
  • Health issues
  • Student engagement
  • Integrate
  • Home economics
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