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The comparison of various course kinds pursued by the students is given by the pie charts, over the three years of 1984, 1994 and 2004.

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Introduction
The comparison of various course kinds pursued by the students is given by the pie charts, over the three years of 1984, 1994 and 2004.
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Overall
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, during these years,
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face-to-face
face
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courses
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 topped it each time,
while
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 with the addition of a new type, the least used means altered.
Body paragraph 2
Initially
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,
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courses
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 accounted for 67%,
while
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 a stark contrast was visible for mixed media at 13% and correspondence at 20%. Turning to the data for the year 1994, a completely different pattern emerged, with the contribution of online
courses
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. Dominating the chart was again
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face to
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courses
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,
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 online
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 represented the lowest proportion.
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, shifting focus to the median, mixed media and correspondencestood at 15 and 20
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,respectively.
Conclusion
By the turn of the century, still, a vast majority of students engaged in
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face-to-face
face
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courses
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 at 40% and were followed by mixed media at 35%. As for the least utilised category, online
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 constituted at 10%,
similarly
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 correspondence
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 stood at 15%

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task response
Give a clear main view of all three charts. Say how the face-to-face share fell over time, and how mixed media rose by the end.
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Check every number and write it in the same form. For example, write “15%” or “15 percent”, not both. Make clear that correspondence was 20% in the first two years and then fell to 15%.
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Use direct chart language. “Face-to-face courses made up 67% in 1984” is clearer than “a stark contrast was visible”.
coherence and cohesion
Use one body paragraph for the first two years and one for the last year, or one paragraph for face-to-face and mixed media and one for the other two types.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid long sentences with too many ideas. Break them into short, clear sentences so the reader can follow the data.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care. Words such as “however”, “while”, “by 2004”, and “in contrast” will show changes more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Fix small writing errors that stop the flow, such as “correspondencestood”, spaces before commas, and “constituted at”. Write “correspondence stood at 15%” and “online courses accounted for 10%”.
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You describe all three years and include the main course types and their shares.
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You notice the key point that face-to-face courses were the largest group in each year.
coherence and cohesion
Your answer has an opening, an overall view, and details in time order.
coherence and cohesion
You use some helpful time phrases, such as “Initially”, “in 1994”, and “By the turn of the century”.
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