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Some people say that a teacher’s main role in school is to motivate and inspire students. However, others believe that a teacher’s primary role is to pass on knowledge. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
There is an ongoing debate about whether a teacher's primary role involves providing
students
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 with motivation and encouragement,
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 others argue that an educator's key responsibility is to impart
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. I personally side with the latter view, as I believe that the
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students
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 acquire from their
teachers
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 is essential for achieving higher academic results.
Body paragraph 1
Those who support the former view believe that when
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 praise
students
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 for their achievements and deliver more engaging lessons,
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 develop a stronger desire to learn.
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, pupils become more actively involved in lessons, ask questions more frequently and are more willing to overcome academic challenges.
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, a student who
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 struggles with mathematics may become more confident when a teacher acknowledges their progress and provides additional encouragement.
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 can motivate them to demonstrate increased enthusiasm for learning and work harder to improve their academic performance. As their confidence grows, they may become less afraid of making mistakes and more willing to tackle challenging tasks.
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On the other hand
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,
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 play crushing role in providing
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 with essential
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 and developing their understanding of academic subjects.
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 motivation can encourage
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study
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 harder, it cannot replace proper instruction and
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 understanding of
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, even highly motivated
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 may struggle to solve complex mathematical and scientific problems if they
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 a clear explanation of the underlying principles.
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, imparting
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 should remain a teacher's main responsibility, as it provides
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 with the academic foundation necessary for future success.
Conclusion
To sum up
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, I believe that
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' responsibility to impart
knowledge
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, rather than simply providing motivation, plays a more
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 success.

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task response
You discuss both views and give a clear view. To make your answer stronger, explain more fully why passing on knowledge should be more important than motivation, not only useful for good school results.
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Your examples are clear and fit the topic. You could add one more real school example, such as a teacher who explains a hard idea step by step, to show why good teaching cannot be replaced by praise.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear order: introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a short ending. Keep this plan in future essays.
coherence and cohesion
The links between ideas are good, but some sentences in the first main paragraph say almost the same thing about confidence and trying hard. Make this part shorter, then use the space to develop your own view.
coherence and cohesion
Use accurate forms in a few places: write “teachers play a crucial role”, “encourage students to study harder”, “understanding of subjects”, and “students’ success”.
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You answer every part of the question. Your own view is clear from the start and stays the same until the end.
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The maths example clearly shows how praise can help a student want to learn and try again.
coherence and cohesion
Each main paragraph has one clear main idea, and words such as “As a result”, “For instance”, and “Therefore” help the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
The ending clearly repeats your main view and gives the essay a complete shape.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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