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Although there are a lot of translation software available, learning a language could still be advantageous. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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Introduction
Translation
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software
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 and AI are now very common in
language
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translation
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, and some people think that learning languages now is worthless.
However
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, I totally disagree, and I think learning a
language
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 is still advantageous.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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,
translation
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software
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 can translate
wrongly
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incorrectly
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, and it mixes up many
things
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.
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, one word can have a lot of meanings, and many of sowftwares mix between the different words that change the whole meaning.
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, I think
language
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 is not just a
language
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,
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;
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 it is a whole culture. Many of the jokes, hints, and
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apply
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other
things
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translation
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that translation
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software
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 cannot explain. So sowftwares don't have the human accuracy.
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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, living in a different country that have different
language
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 is a very important reason for learning languages. If you live in forgein nation, it is hard to adapt without the
language
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,
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 you cannot depend on
software
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 in
this
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 case.
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, if an asian live in the USA and doesn't know English, it will be very hard for him to find good work and make contact with others. Maybe he can handle basic
things
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 like shopping, but making friends and working will still be a big problem for him.
Conclusion
In conclusion, learning languages was and will still benefit you.
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Human
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 accuracy and the culture of the
language
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 are still
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 that
software
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 cannot replace.

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task response
Your answer clearly says that you disagree, and you give two main reasons. To make your ideas stronger, explain more about how wrong translation can cause real problems, such as at a hospital, at work, or when making an agreement.
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Your example about a person living in the USA is useful and on topic. Make it more real by adding one clear situation, such as speaking to a boss, a teacher, or a doctor. This will help show why an app is not enough.
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Try to develop each main point a little more. For example, explain why jokes, hints, and culture matter when people make friends or work together.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear order: introduction, two body parts, and conclusion. Keep this plan in future essays.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer links between ideas. You can use words such as “For example”, “As a result”, “In addition”, and “Therefore” to show how one sentence leads to the next.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are too long or joined in a way that is not clear. Break them into shorter sentences. For example: “If a person lives in the USA and does not know English, it can be hard to find a good job. Translation software may help with shopping, but it cannot fully help at work.”
coherence and cohesion
Check key word forms and spelling, as these can make your meaning less clear: “software” not “sowftwares”, “foreign” not “forgein”, and “lives” not “live” after “an Asian”.
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You answer the question directly and keep your ideas focused on why learning a language is still useful.
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The points about wrong meanings, culture, daily life, work, and making friends are all relevant to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Each body part has one main idea, which makes the essay easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion returns to your main view and repeats the key ideas in a clear way.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Cognitive Flexibility
  • Idiomatic Expressions
  • Career Advancement
  • Multilingual
  • Proficiency
  • Empathy
  • Cultural Barriers
  • Native Speaker Fluency
  • Colloquialisms
  • Language Acquisition
  • Immersive Experience
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