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Some people believe that university education should be free for all students, regardless of their financial background. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Many people think that schooling fees should be free, regardless of their personal economic and family's financial background. In my opinion, I totally disagree that every student
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 pay for their
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Body paragraph 1
There are several reasons that disagree with
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 statement.
First,
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 can lead to financial problems for
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 and the university.
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, every intstitution need to repair and improve its own infrasructures
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 as classes, offices, libraries and other furnitures and
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 giving salary to its employees. If the university can not adjust that financial system, it would caused
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 pay for
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 serious issue to support the continuity of science.
Second,
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most students can pay their educational tuition, and they do not have any complain for the fee , which is acceptable to most people.
Body paragraph 2
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, in my perspective, there are some student who don't have to pay for their studies in
academy
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due to
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 their special financial situations or personal behaviour. The educational institution and
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goverment
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 must give their solution for these exceptions as they need help for those conditions.
Conclusion
To conclude
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, universities should not give free literacy as it can lead serious impact for institution,
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 and employees because they need a proper financial system for long-term study and
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 pay attantion for right student that need tuitions free.

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task response
Your main view is clear: universities should not be free for every student. Keep this view the same from the start to the end.
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Answer the words “for all students” more fully. Explain why rich students can pay, while poor students may need help.
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Develop each main point with a clear reason and result. For example, say that fees help pay for teachers, books, rooms, and new tools. Then explain what may happen if this money is not there.
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Your example is too general. Give one simple real-life example, such as a student from a low-income family who gets free study or a grant.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two body parts, and an end. This is a good basic plan.
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Use clearer topic sentences at the start of each body part. For example: “There are two main reasons why all university study should not be free.”
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Put one main idea in each paragraph. In the first body part, focus on university costs. In the next part, focus on help for poor students.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care: “First”, “Also”, “However”, “For this reason”, and “In conclusion”. Do not repeat the same link too often.
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Make the last sentence more direct. State that students who can pay should pay, but students in need should get help.
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You give a clear opinion and do not change it.
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You include an important balanced idea: some students need financial help.
coherence and cohesion
The essay uses paragraphs and has both an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as “First”, “Second”, and “However” help the reader follow your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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