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The table below shows the results of a survey of first-year students taking various courses at a particular university. It shows how many of the students considered various aspects of their course ‘very good’.

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The table below shows the results of a survey of first-year students taking various courses at a particular university. It shows how many of the students considered various aspects of their course ‘very good’.
The table compares the results of the survey of first-year university
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 taking multiple courses in terms of the high quality of different aspects of their courses between 2000 and 2010.
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, the
students
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 were asked to access from teaching quality to building/teaching facilities. It can be clearly seen that the opinions of the
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 on most aspects of the university were the same during the period,
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 the electronic resources seem to have undergone a significant improvement. Focusing on the teaching quality, it was considered very good by 65
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 in 2000, 63
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 in 2005, and 69
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 in 2010.
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the print resources followed a similar trend, which means 84
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 were very positive about
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 aspect in 2000, 89
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 in 2005, and 88
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 in 2010.
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, the only facility that was dramatically enhanced was the electronic resources, as 45
students
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 considered it very good at the beginning of the period, 72
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 in 2005, and 88
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 towards the end. As for the range of modules offered,
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 facility slightly lost its position among
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; 32
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 considered it very good in 2000, and 27
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 were positive in 2010.
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, the building/teaching facility was always considered very good by exactly 77
students
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 throughout the period.

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