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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for buyers and online companies?

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In our period, most
of
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people
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 prefer to do shopping online
and
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 the number of buyers
increase
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increases
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 rapidly. They suppose that shopping online is
comfortable
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more comfortable
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rather
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than going
store
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to a store
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, some
people
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 argue that online shopping is less convenient than shopping in traditional stores.
This
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 essay will touch on its advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, purchasers are able to save time
while
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 doing shopping online and choose what they want easily.
Especially it is
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 convenient and suitable for
people
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 who work a lot during the day. Despite the convenience, a significant drawback is
material
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 of
clothes
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clothes,
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 given that they don't know how
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the material will seem
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hand
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 online shopping is fast and easy
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 it has pros and cons
sometimes
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. Sometimes,
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people
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 don't
recieve
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receive
 products
how
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as
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 they see on platforms. Most of the time they write comments about things they don't like and complain
things
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about things
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 that they order.
Morever
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Moreover,
 the
color
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 of
product
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the product
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seem
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seems
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 so faded
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 they
recieve
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receive it
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 they liked its material and
colur
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colour
 on
website
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the website
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, online shopping has advantages and disadvantages. You should pay attention
products feedbacks
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to product feedback
 and avoid buying clothes or products without exploring
on
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social websites.
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Furthermore
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 when you face
challange
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a challenge,
 you should make sure you can fix
this
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 issue easily .

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task response
Answer all parts of the question. Write about good and bad points for both buyers and online companies. Your essay mainly talks about buyers, so add a full part about companies. For example, companies can sell to more people and save money on shops, but they may face many returns and bad reviews.
task response
Make each main idea clear and explain it. For buyers, saving time is a good point. Add why this matters, such as people can buy after work. For the bad point, explain that buyers cannot touch or try clothes, so they may get the wrong size, colour, or quality.
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Use one clear example for each side. For example: a small online shop can sell to people in many cities, but it must pay for delivery and deal with unhappy buyers when an item is not as shown.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: introduction; advantages for buyers and companies; disadvantages for buyers and companies; conclusion. This will help the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body paragraph with one clear main idea. Do not put many ideas in one long sentence. For example: “One advantage for buyers is that online shopping saves time.” Then explain this idea before moving to the next one.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more carefully. “On the one hand” should match “On the other hand.” You can also use “First,” “Also,” “However,” “For example,” and “As a result” to show how ideas connect.
coherence and cohesion
Make the final paragraph sum up the main points, rather than give new advice to the reader. State the main good and bad points for buyers and companies in one or two sentences.
task response
You give clear buyer ideas, such as saving time, easy choice, and the problem of clothes that do not look the same as on the website.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and an ending, so the reader can see the main shape of your writing.
coherence and cohesion
You use some helpful linking words, such as “However,” “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “As a result.”
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online
  • buy
  • buyer
  • customer
  • company
  • shop
  • price
  • cost
  • delivery
  • returns
  • refund
  • time
  • convenience
  • choice
  • review
  • trust
  • safety
  • privacy
  • fraud
  • discount
  • offer
  • market
  • sell
  • cheap
  • fast
  • easy
  • policy
  • customer
  • purchase
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