In a number of countries, some people thin k it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
Nowadays, manufacturing and transporting resources are one of the main types of income for
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statement is becoming more common among people, and the new view that the largest part of the economy should be spent on constructing new railways is gaining popularity.
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, the others believe that improving public transport is more necessary for residents. I partly agree with both thoughts, because both can fix ecological issues and are advantageous for many individuals.
Body paragraph 1
The first statement has more reasons that make it better for the long term.
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, the railway construction will have an impressive impact on transporting not only passangers and
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the material between large cities, that make transfer safer and faster than it is now.
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as danger on road traffic, creating new places for job seekers, and a beneficial effect on the environment.
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leading a positive impact on residents' daily schedule.
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, it can decrease the time that spending for road, and public transport will be more convenient and comfortable for people.
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, it can cause an increase in bus users , which in order beneficaly effect to the environment's ecology.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I believe that the governments will split the budget for both these statements and create the greatest future for the new generation with several changes.

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Discuss both views in a more full way. Explain why fast train lines may help travel between cities, and why better buses, trains, and roads may help people every day.
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Make your own view clear. You say you partly agree with both views, but you should say how the money should be shared and why. For example, say that cities need better local transport first, while fast rail can be built on key routes.
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Give more real and clear examples. Instead of only saying that rail is safer or faster, explain a case: a fast train can take people from one large city to another and may cut the number of cars on the road.
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Be careful with ideas that are too broad. New rail lines can help the environment, but building them can also cost a lot and take many years. Show both sides of this point.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two body parts, and an end. Keep this plan, but make each body part focus on one main idea.
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Use clear topic sentences. For example: “Fast rail lines are useful for long trips between major cities.” Then explain this idea before moving to the next point.
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Link ideas more naturally. Use simple words such as “First”, “Also”, “However”, “As a result”, and “In contrast”. Do not use “Subsequently” when a simpler link is clearer.
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Some sentences are hard to follow because the grammar is not clear. Write shorter sentences and check the main subject and verb. For example, write “This can make travel safer and faster” rather than a long sentence with many ideas.
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You answer both parts of the question and give your own view at the start and at the end.
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You include useful points about travel time, road safety, jobs, and the environment.
coherence and cohesion
The essay follows a clear order: introduction, one view, the other view, and conclusion.
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Words such as “For instance”, “On the other hand”, and “In conclusion” help the reader see the main parts of your essay.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • high-speed rail network
  • intercity travel
  • cut journey times
  • economic centres
  • reduce carbon emissions
  • public investment
  • construction costs
  • daily commuters
  • existing infrastructure
  • overcrowded services
  • unreliable timetables
  • urban transport system
  • affordable fares
  • improve connectivity
  • meet public demand
  • cost-effective solution
  • regional development
  • busy transport corridors
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