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You have recently moved to a different city. You did not have a chance to tell your friend about the move. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter • Explain why you decided to move • Compare your new home with your previous home • Tell him/her about the area you are now living in Đã gửi

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Dear BINH I’m writing
this
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 letter to share with you about my new decision. Because when I moved to Da Nang
City
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, I didn’t have a chance to tell you about the news. I have recently moved to Da Nang
City
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. It is very crowded and
bustle
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bustling
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. Residents here are very friendly, cute and kind. I decided to move
to
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here because I want to have opportunities to develop myself, my work and expand my knowledge. Da Nang is a beautiful
city
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, it is famous for bridges like Dragon
Bridge
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, Han River
Bridge
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, Thuan Phuoc
Bridge
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,
Tran
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and Tran
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 Thi Ly
Bridge
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.
Although
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,
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 my new home isn’t more comfortable than my previous home, and facilities are
lack
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lacking
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. I live
a
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in a
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suburban
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suburb
 of the
city
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, but still crowded populate. If I want to go to the
center
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centre
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 of the
city
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, I will drive
around
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for around
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 15-20 minutes.
Besides
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 that, Danang
City
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 offers me many job opportunities,
I
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which I
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consider that
this
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 opens the gateway for me to enrich my experience, widen my practical knowledge and enhance my social relationships.
In addition
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, the weather here is more pleasant & comfortable, what’s more,
cost
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the cost
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 of living is much cheaper than my previous place. Indeed, Danang is a very
liveable
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livable
city
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. I hope that you have
chances
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the chance
 to visit me in
this
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city
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. Sincerely Mr. Thach

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Answer all three parts in a clear way. Say why you moved, how the two homes are different, and what the new area is like. Add one or two real details about your home and area.
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Use a more natural letter style. Start with “Dear Binh,” and end with “Best wishes,” or “Take care,” rather than “Mr. Thach.”
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Avoid saying the same idea more than once. The points about work and learning can be put together in one short part.
coherence and cohesion
Use short paragraphs: one for the move, one for the new and old homes, and one for the area. This will make the letter easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words such as “because”, “also”, “however”, and “so”. Do not begin a new sentence with “Although” unless you finish the full contrast.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main idea. The part about bridges, jobs, weather, and cost has too many ideas together.
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You cover the main points of the letter: your reason for moving, your home, and the new city.
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You give clear reasons for the move, such as work, learning, and new chances.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start and a friendly wish for your friend to visit at the end.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words, such as “because”, “besides that”, and “in addition”.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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