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The charts below show the performance of spending on roads and transport in four countries from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts below show the performance of spending on roads and transport in four countries from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
We can notice the difference between these four countries.
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, we have Italia. The
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 with the most
transport
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 usage is 2000, and the
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 with the least
transport
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 usage is 2005. I think the
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 is that anyone who has a car or any vichals
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 the
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, in my opinion, to make the use of buses or trains less than before.
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 Portugal. In 1990
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, I saw that it was the highest
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 of using
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, why? I think it's the same
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 with Italia. And look at the
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 2005, which is the lowest
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 of using these means. That means coming back to the same cause. Third UK. The rate of its years is varied, I mean , we can't pinpoint the
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. So maybe the
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 is their economy, I mean ,
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, in 2000, maybe they had the highest economy between 1995,1990 and 2005. Fourth USA. Look at their varied but
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 we can observe the
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. I think in 1995, they had the unemployment issue. why? Because if there are many humans who don't have any work, they won't use the transportation means.
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, in 2005
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, they used it more and more because they got a lot of jobs.
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, every country has its reasons and its issues.
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, society is one of the most important factors
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 affect and change the rate of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spend, spending, spend on roads, spend on transport
  • roads, transport, road building, public transport
  • increase, rise, go up, grow
  • decrease, fall, drop, go down
  • stable, steady, unchanged
  • high, low, the most, the least
  • gap, difference
  • period, from 1990 to 2005
  • pattern, trend
  • in contrast, whereas
  • within a country, across countries
  • both, either
  • peak, reach a peak
  • fluctuate
  • overall, generally
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