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Access to clear water is a basic human right. Therefore, every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
The maps illustrate how the layout of Beechwood
Farm
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 has changed between 1950 and the present day.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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, the
farm
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 has undergone substantial redevelopment. The areas used to grow crops have remained largely unchanged,
while
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 some of the land formerly used for farming now provides visitor accommodation.
Body paragraph 2
In 1950, the
farm
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 was devoted to crop and livestock farming. The large field in the north was used entirely for sheep. On the eastern side of the
farm
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, a large barn stood just south of the track, with the farmhouse and chicken enclosure farther south. The western side was devoted to crop cultivation, with separate plots for fruit trees, soft fruits and vegetables.
Conclusion
Since
then
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, the
farm
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 has undergone extensive changes. The crop-growing plots have retained their original layout,
although
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 a
farm
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 shop has been added next to the fruit trees. The former sheep field has been divided into two sections, with a campsite to the west and solar panels to the east. Both sections have parking areas connected to the new road network, which replaced the old tracks. The barn is now smaller and stands farther south,
while
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 its former site is occupied by holiday cottages.

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task response
Make sure every main change is named. For example, say if the chicken area or farmhouse stayed the same, if this is clear in the maps. This will make the report more complete.
task response
Add a little more detail about where each new place is. For example, say that the holiday homes are on the old barn site, and the new barn is to the south.
coherence and cohesion
Your report is easy to follow: it has an opening, a clear main view, and one part for each time. Keep this order in future map reports.
coherence and cohesion
Use a few more link words to show place and change, such as "to the north", "next to", "in place of", and "while". This can make the links between ideas even smoother.
task response
You give a clear main view of the biggest changes: the crop land stayed much the same, while farm land was changed for people to visit and stay.
task response
You include key changes, such as the camp site, solar panels, car parks, new roads, shop, holiday homes, and the smaller barn.
coherence and cohesion
The ideas are in a clear order. The first main part shows the old farm, and the next main part explains the new plan.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as "Overall", "Since then", "although", and "while" help the reader follow the report.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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