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Band 7.5 The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing?

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Introduction
In recent
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 the internet
expanded
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has expanded
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 opportunities in terms of accessing information. It allows students
learn
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to learn
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 on their own, without being dependent on teachers or classroom lessons.
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 largely believe that
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 thing to society.
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The primary reason
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 believe
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 is an upward thing is that it offers
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a variety
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 of tools that enable students to learn independently.
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, in mathematics, learners can quickly acquire various materials or find challenging questions and their thorough explanations online through different websites. It enables them to tackle these issues at their convenience rather than waiting for
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 for the same purpose, which allows them to create their own learning pace, at any time
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, anywhere
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 they want. Throughout
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 improves their learning abilities, and inspires them to become more independent
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 is crucial to life
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,
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 the learning support, searching through the internet saves money for the public.
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people
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being able to
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 freely access
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the resources they need and learn about specific details they are passionate about
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 computer.
evidence
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 can be seen from the example that online dictionary websites provide individuals
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 makes it unnecessary to purchase expensive books.
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,the internet has brought many opportunities as it is not only a tool for supporting
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students' self-study
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 makes it more suitable for those who want to save money.
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,
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 tremendously believe
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 is a positive development

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State your view more clearly in the first part. Say that you agree to a large extent, but also show that the internet can have some bad sides, such as false information.
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Develop each main idea further. Explain why learning at any time helps students, and why free online tools can help people with less money.
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Your examples are useful, especially the maths and online dictionary examples. Make them more exact by showing a result, such as a student being able to practise before a test.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear four-part shape: first part, two body parts, and a last part. Keep this shape, but make the link between ideas smoother.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear link words correctly: “For example”, “As a result”, “In addition”, and “However”. Do not use “On the other hand” for a second good point; use “In addition” instead.
coherence and cohesion
Break up long sentences. Some sentences have many ideas, so the meaning is less clear. Put one main idea in each sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating “I believe” and “it allows”. Use other simple forms, such as “This means that”, “As a result”, and “People can”.
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You answer the question directly and give a clear positive view of wider access to information.
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You use relevant examples about maths websites and online dictionaries, which support your main points.
coherence and cohesion
Each body part has one main focus: learning on your own and saving money.
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The last part returns to your main view and sums up the two key reasons.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • access to information
  • a positive development
  • free online courses
  • digital libraries
  • academic sources
  • independent learning
  • make informed decisions
  • compare prices and services
  • health awareness
  • current affairs
  • a range of sources
  • misleading information
  • fake news
  • spread rapidly
  • social media platforms
  • reliable sources
  • check the accuracy of information
  • digital literacy
  • critical thinking skills
  • information overload
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